Brown Eyed Susan 2

Posted by Kevin Welch on June 17, 2011

Saturday. In the evening she stood on the porch and surveyed the mud, and it seemed to be congealing a bit. Off to the north side of the drive was a low lying field that sloped down to the tree line that ran along the creek. All of this bowl was filled with mist, and all through the mist hung thousands of fireflies caught in the web of water and air. They twinkled like Christmas, and the bullfrogs and crickets chattered and spoke.

All her boxes were stacked, taped and labeled in the front room, lumpy towers of cardboard and whisky labels. All her art lay leaning against the front wall in a disarray of frames. The vacuum sweeper, the broom, the bucket. A suitcase, a small pile of clothes on hangers draped over the tallest tower. The microwave was temporarily plugged in to the outlet by the gas log fireplace, and she had eaten something from it an hour ago, without tasting it. She hadn’t started to load up. It was just all too much.

The kitchen screen door squeaked and banged shut behind her as she went out back to ponder the refuse lined along the wall, rusting quietly within the embrace of the weeds and the spiders. It was the stuff that didn’t need to be thrown away, nor stored, but was still important enough to keep within view. Solvents mostly. Paint, paint thinner, left-over polyurethane. Several used air-con filters, some scrap pine.
She was picking each container up, hefting it, moving to the next and doing the same, the light fading making it harder to read the labels, so she flicked her bic lighter for the last couple, the air silvery and flammable. Then she unscrewed first one, then the next, and the next, and began layering them one on one, all along the back wall, first pouring out this, and then the next thing, carefully pouring a continuous line, and then, standing off to the side all awkward and jumpy, she reached in and lit the edge of the solvent milkshake. The results were an immediate whump and puff of blue flame and crackles and all of a sudden she was loading her stuff out the front door like she was the American Team for Packing Up And Leaving Quick and she was in the running for the Gold Medal. The flames towered over the rear roofline and grinned down at her and she threw the last unpacked drape of curtains on top of her boxes, unrolled a gleaming white middle finger, and gunned the truck straight in and out of the bog, bouncing and fishtailing up onto the hardtop, where she floored it and fled. The lovely flames yawned, cackled and spread, leveling everything, and they eventually died, sadly, from neglect.

5 Responses to Brown Eyed Susan 2

  1. M

    I want to be on the road with her. Or am I left behind. Maybe I am that milkshake. Take me somewhere I have yet to be.

  2. Catherine Todd

    I’ve been thinking about this story all day and I’m bothered by the fact taht am writing far more than I should on YOUR blog. Feel free to not post anything I’ve written. I will try to refrain. I get carried away late at night when I’ve been up all night working and need to take a break. These stories get me going all right.

    You can use the link I provided to add an automatic feed for notices of comments to your subscribers, and there’s another button you can add for blog updates. Thanks for sharing your stories. I look forward to more.

    • Kevin Welch

      thank you very much. Where is that link? I’d like to try it out…..

  3. Catherine Todd

    The link to “add comment notification” was on the first Brown Eyed Susan story. Here it is again. It works if you are using WordPress for your blog (which it looks like you are). If you are using something different, let me know and I’ll find out how to do it. There are lots of plug-ins for WordPress and other blogs that allow you to do all kinds of crazy things!

    * WordPress › Subscribe to Comments « WordPress Plugins
    Dec 14, 2007 … Subscribe to Comments is a robust plugin that enables commenters to sign up for e-mail notification of subsequent entries. …

    http://wordpress.org/extend/plugins/subscribe-to-comments/

  4. Catherine Todd

    Question about “Brown Eyed Susan 2″

    What was YOUR feelings about all this? That’s the part that’s missing… want to know MORE.

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